POV revisited


With regard to POV and opinion, I’ve come across too many instances in published writing where I’m right and the people (critique-ers) who say I’m not are wrong.

Below is a perfect example of proving my case — from one of many of the books I’ve read — by award-winning and well-known authors no less. This is done in order to help myself (and you, perhaps) feel better about and more confident in writing in 3rd person narrative — omniscient or otherwise.

From Midnight Angel by Lisa Kleypas

After a short silence, Luke began to laugh. He was a handsome man in his mid-thirties, with black hair and vivid blue eyes. His face was more notable for its masculinity than its beauty, with a stern mouth and a nose that was well-shaped but a little too long. The smile he wore most often was that of a man who mocked his own importance. He had an air of cynical charm that others strove to copy. When he laughed, as he was doing now, the laughter never quite reached his eyes.

It isn’t a character or Luke himself doing the observing but the author.

Perfectly legal, acceptable, and necessary in this instance, when Luke is with two inconsequential characters at the time of this passage. It is about him, his need of a governess, and the way he behaves, feels, and looks in order for the reader to get a better idea of him this early in the novel.

Anymore, it is becoming clear why these criticisms crop up and it is because the ones doing the critique-ing like and read or are more comfortable with first-person pov. They are not familiar with nor have they read beyond this narrow scope of pov to know better.

It is refreshing and encouraging to come across such passages in NYTBS work. I will definitely take their word over a critique-er’s advice about the same topic any day.

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3 Responses to POV revisited

  1. wscottling says:

    That kind of description always makes me twitch, it’s kind of lazy. Then again, I really don’t like omniscient narrators. I also really dislike it when a character looks at themselves in a mirror for no other purpose than to give the reader a description of the character, their flaws, their fashion sense, and (god forbid) a flashback… There are much better ways. But, that is my own, personal opinion and everyone is allowed to have their own opinion. ^_^

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    • RaiBal says:

      Hi! Of course you’re welcome to your own opinion. Still, I don’t believe if you were critiquing my writing that you would say I am wrong to write it that way, or that it isn’t written that way. I feel the exact opposite way you do, and I believe there are times when omniscient perspective enhances a story. It was necessary in Kleypas’s case at any rate. Either way, it is acceptable and correct style writing. Flashbacks are awesome! 😀 As long as they don’t go on for paragraphs and can be summed up in less than four or five sentences.
      Thanks kindly for reading my post and commenting, too.


      • wscottling says:

        I have nothing against flashbacks per se, I just don’t like it when a character glances into a mirror for the sole purpose of describing themselves to the reader or igniting a flashback — it’s a trope that’s overused.

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